well its still raw and needs much improvement

[iron_and_silver]

but here is my short story thus far..

The sound of the adjacent pale girl cracking her knuckles made me wonder if her fingers were really made of bone. Perhaps they were made of something harder, and that made her instantly envious. If you could make people out of that unknown substance, then she wouldn’t be here.
I looked up as i heard the little jingle from the bell that hung on the poorly painted door. He was 45 minutes late. Johnny’s once dirty long hair had been replaced by a trim cut with meduim length bangs. His trademark sunglasses were gone and I could see his piercing black eyes. His walk was slow and methodical. He stared at me cooly as he walked to my table and sat down.
“I thought we agreed on-”
“Well. I had some things to do.” He motioned to the waitress that he wanted to order. She came, took his order, and winked at him as she left. I writhed in my chair. He didn’t move.
“So why this place?” He said as he surveyed the room.
“C’mon...You don’t remember? The concert 2 years ago?” I pursed my lips and leaned forward, making my hair swing around my light brown eyes and covering them.
“Oh. That was a long time ago..” He leaned back in the squeaky chair.
The waitress came back with his coffee and attempted to make small talk but he blew her off. Silence crept into the air and infected our conversation. I stared at him and began to drown in the white flatlands of his eyes. I was finding happiness.
“So uh, did you hope that 6 months would have magicly healed this?” He asked because he could feel my happiness.
My hand slowly crawled down into the dark pit of my pocket and grabbed a small white pill. Then it climbed up to my mouth and opened. His eyes slanted and all the parts on his face seemed to have a come together to confer about the current events.
“What is that for?” he asked.
I opened my small mouth and placed the little pill on my cold wet tongue, closed my eyes amd swallowed. I sighed and focused on him.
“It’s for my heartburn.” I said looking away.
“Oh...well you never answered me. Did you?” He leaned close and i shivered quietly. His dark hair seemed to move slowly forward like oncoming rain clouds.
“No..well..sort of..I dunno..maybe. Look, I just wanted to see you at least.” My hands began to shake and my face turned cold and pale. He leaned back and folded his arms across his chest. He darted his eyes about her like a busy honey bee.
“Well I can’t promise a future, but i can promise a now. I’ve got enough cash on me for one day.”
“What about your place?” I became nervous.
“No. It’s either this or nothing. Look, i can walk right out of here right now.”
The table suddenly turned dark red and her mouth became salty. she had to blink several times for the blue to return. He moved his knife and fork next to each other and straightened his area.
“Well? What’s your decision?”
His gaze became hard and solid like stone and she moved only to find a comfortable position but gave up when she could not.
“Ok..but can we stop my place so i can grab a change of clothes for afterwards..?” I rubbed my hands so hard it caused pain.
“No. I’ve got a date. I’ll just drop you off and i’ll call you a cab. we’ll see what happens.”
He got up and she had to walk fast in order to follow him. As they walked outside into the breath of december, she put on her gloves, scarf, and zipped up her jacket but she still shivered. She could not shiver enough to shed the most naked feeling she had felt in her life.


c'mon. anyone wanna comment?:-)

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Re: hmmm...

[iron_and_silver]

lol see. i really need to rework. thank god only the rough draft is due tommorrow