poem

[iron_and_silver]

the geography of my body in the bathtub

my face is a cliff
my breasts are sand dunes
my stomach is an island
my knees and thigs are tall plateaus
my vagina is a grand canyon
my toes are mountain climbers
clinging to the flat surface of porcelin.
12-11-02

it still needs work but its getting there

Comments

[sogentlywego.livejournal.com]

Interesting poem. However, spelling is a major factor in successfully conveying your thoughts and feelings to the reader. :) I am so grammarpolice's snob child.

[voicelessloud.livejournal.com]

in poetry correct spelling is a good thing, but proper grammar and puncuation can often be thrown out the window.
i think febe writes like me, get your ideas out first and then correct it later.
:0)